“The Playground”

A shiny, vinyl-clad fence
Surrounds the playground
Of my youth.
A heavy lock of steel
Denies access
To the children who
Congregate in the street.
I relive the games
Played on asphalt
Swept clear of snow
In winter
Cursed with stored heat
In summer.
I remember the water bottle
With the rusty spigot
Which hung on a post
Where we would cup
Our hands to drink
Or splash our faces
For relief.
I see the new bottle
With the new spigot
Which hangs on the new fence
Behind the locked gate
Out of reach
Of the children
Who play in the street.
And I am sad.

(Inspired by “Faucet/Tap“, Friday Fictioneers photo on madison-woods.com, July 27, 2012.)

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30 Responses to “The Playground”

  1. claireful says:

    A lovely nostalgic feeling to this piece of writing. And the last line was perfect.


  2. It’s unfortunately that this situation is so true to life. Lawsuits or the threat of them, nothing being an accident anymore, has a lot to answer for!!

    • vbholmes says:

      Thanks for commenting–it seems any available public money is going to the formal parks while the neighborhood playgrounds are neglected. Enjoyed reading your story–sad message as well.

      • Glad you enjoyed it. Thankfully we’re currently getting some rain and had a bit yesterday as well. It’s all appreciated, especially when it doesn’t come as a destructive storm.

  3. billgncs says:

    I really liked this…. nice

    • vbholmes says:

      Thanks! I see your bike in your Gravitar–hope it survived the crash and that you heal quickly.

      • billgncs says:

        thanks — the bike is well, my body broke it’s fall.

        looks like surgery on wed for pins, and then 6-8 weeks ot healing with no riding.

        thanks for stopping by and asking — bw

  4. Sandra says:

    So true, you turned it back again nicely.

  5. unspywriter says:

    Very nice juxtaposition of past and present and how progress isn’t necessarily a good thing.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/shadows/

  6. New, but out of reach. Well expressed. An older generation of fond memories and a younger generation being teased by something they needed but were not allowed to enjoy.


  7. Brian Benoit says:

    The nicest part of this was the return of the lock image, and the way it feels like the speaker is locked out of a return to childhood. Great images throughout too, though, and a nice flow.

    Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/07/27/sugartooth/)

  8. Russell says:

    This was very good, and sure brought back memories. Nobody locked their doors in my youth and they sure didn’t care for kids getting a drink from the faucet–and we always made sure to shut it off.
    Thanks for visiting & commenting on mine. 🙂

  9. It does seem that nostalgia is always tinged with sadness, mourning for things of the past which no longer exist. Great poem!

  10. vbholmes says:

    Thanks for the compliment. I look forward to reading more about Marci and her world. Good story!

  11. beebeesworld says:

    Thanks for reading my blog on Lifes’ Little Lesssons, and for your thoughtful comment. So much of my life seems like this innocence interrupted by callousness. I enjoyed reading some of your artcles, noticed you participate i Friday Fictioneers as well. I will follow your blog and look forward to reading more. I hope you will check out some of my other articles and follow my blog as well. Best wishes, beebeesworld

  12. vbholmes says:

    Thanks for your comments and following my blog–I revisited yours and am now a follower. I also read your post “A week…” and you did a great job of capturiing the enjoyment of the last of the schedule-free days of summer.

    • beebeesworld says:

      Thanks-somehow thru your blog, i found a site called The Big Blog Collection-I cant seem to figure out how to look up a specific blog, I got onto this thru what I thought was someone on your blog, tried to sign up, but couldn’t get it to work-I have had so much frustration with adding widgets-just when I think, “I’ve got it” it doesn’t work again. Have you done many widgets-if so, how did it work for you? Thanks again for reading. beebeesworld

      • vbholmes says:

        Hi, I don’t think you found “The Big Blog Collection” on my site, but I googled it, and it came right up, so you”ll be able to find it without any trouble. I haven’t heard of it before so can’t recommend (or not recommend) it. Good luck!

      • beebeesworld says:

        You are right, it was on the next blog I looked at, and after doing the same thing I had done 10 times, I finally got the button-sorry to bother you with that. I did enjoy your site and will be back!
        This “Big Blog Collection” is from across the pond-we’ll see how it goes!

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