“The Marriage Celebration”

We pile into
The Lincoln stretch.
Nine nurses
Out on the town
Headed for a hotel
To celebrate the marriage
Of one of our own.
We talk
We laugh
We joke around.

“You smell smoke?”
The question hangs
In the closed air
Around us.
“Smoke.”
We tap on the partition
Dividing us from
The driver.

“No smoking”
He says
The radio blaring
In his ear.
We bang
On the glass.
“Pull over”
“Pull over”
We cry.

The smoke
Swirls
Around us
And the car
Glides to a stop.
Legs flail
As bodies
Squeeze through
The opening
Between cab
And passenger seats.

We push to take our turns.
Only four of us
Make it through
To the front seat.
The rear door
Flies open.
Flames
Flicker and flare.

And then
It is over.
No explosion.
No car bodies
Flying through the air
Just fire.
Lethal
Unrelenting
Fire.
And our tortured screams
Which mix
With those
Of our
Five
Trapped friends
Who succumb to
The instant inferno

And now.
Only
A charred carcass
Remains
Of a Lincoln stretch
Which once held
Nine
Lovely ladies
Out on the town
To celebrate
The marriage
Of one of their own.

(“Investigators Seek Answers in Deadly Limo Fire“.)

(Written for dVersePoets, Open Link Night Week 95, May 7, 2013.)

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18 Responses to “The Marriage Celebration”

  1. aprille says:

    Horrendous accident. Couldn’t get it out of my head for days. All those lives lost or blighted.
    Brave write.

    • vb holmes says:

      Thanks for reading, aprille. It was a terrible accident and so sad–the loss of five lives with the new bride as one of the victims. (I had included a link to the story but it didn’t work so I have replaced it with an active one.)

  2. brian miller says:

    damn man….true story? how frightening that had to be…and to be out of control seperated from the driver…and what a contrast as well…to celebrate new life and to find death…intense verse

    • vb holmes says:

      This is based on a true story which happened last Saturday night. It was horrific and the story stayed with me. Thanks for the comment, Brian.

  3. Rhonda L. Brockmeyer says:

    I am having trouble hitting like…the question, as Brian asked, is it true..which if it is, Sorry! If it isn’t, fantastic we can’t tell it’s a fictional write. Either way, a very intriguing piece.

    • vb holmes says:

      Unfortunately, this is based on an actual accident–I’ve added a link to the news story at the end of my post..

      • Rhonda L. Brockmeyer says:

        Aw vb…that’s terrible. I’m sorry I didn’t take time to check the links.
        Well. You did a sad story justice.

  4. silently Kim says:

    Nicely written. That is a horrific event that happen. So very sad.

  5. This was awful when it happened–you captured it so well here–made me feel it all over again!

  6. Dang, that is pure terrible. Superbly written, but so sad and tragic. I can see the scene so vivid. You almost have me in shock because I did not expect that. Horrific tale, but written excellente!

    • vb holmes says:

      There are very few, if any, of us who would not react with horror when reading of people trapped in a raging fire–it’s very hard to imagine such a scene. Hopefully, this will never happen again.

  7. Sadly, beautifully tragic.
    Thank you for sharing this.
    Jennifer

  8. aka_andrea says:

    What a tragic story, told so well.

  9. A very tragic accident.. I had never heard of it, but your describe it so well.
    Hope they find the reason and prevent if from ever happen again.

  10. Tragic. The link wouldn’t go through for me, but I looked up the story anyway. Very creative how you told a story that just happened. FOX didn’t have much in the way of details.However, the horror of the situation really came through in your details. Graphic and tight and evokes emotion.

  11. joanna says:

    wow. tragic is right. the minimalism in the lines make your rendition all too real. powerful.

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