“Standing on the Corner”

(Photo by Managua Gunn)

By day, I stand guard at the royal palace. A tedious job, but I relieve the boredom by checking out the girls as they pass by in their tight skirts and low-cut tops.
The highlight of my watch, however, comes when the queen greets the crowd near my post. I critique her walk, wave, hair, clothes. She is beloved by her people but a bit on the dowdy side.
I wish she would stop by the club some evening and catch my after-hours act. She could use some fashion pointers and lessons in body language from a fellow queen.

(Written for Friday Fictioneers, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, June 21, 2013.)

This entry was posted in Flash Fiction, Micro Fiction, Short Fiction, Short Story and tagged , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

34 Responses to “Standing on the Corner”

  1. Dave Higgins says:

    Good twist in the tail.

  2. Hannah says:

    Another nice and original contribution!

  3. misskzebra says:

    This made me laugh. A great twist.

  4. Vb, I’m still laughing about that one. Great twist.


  5. Linda Vernon says:

    Hahahaha! Superb! ;D

  6. wmqcolby says:

    Hahahahaha! Funny!

  7. yep the Queen sure could

  8. Very good.. yes wonder which queen it is 🙂 but I’m sure it applies to the queen of Sweden too

  9. Dear VB,

    A a good story with a royal twist.



  10. nightlake says:

    Lol. enjoyed this take:)

    • vb holmes says:

      Thanks, enjoyed yours as well. Read Eric’s warning to you–hope conditions improve quickly. Take care.

      • nightlake says:

        Thank you kindly. The smog seeps into our living rooms and kitchen. The haze is still there in dangerous levels and all are vulnerable. But, it is particularly disturbing for those with asthma complaints and respiratory problems.

  11. Penny L Howe says:

    Outstanding and clever and highly original! Just great, in other words! 🙂

  12. Sandra says:

    Hah! Economically written, great voice.

  13. Love the way the last sentence throws a completely different light on the second sentence. 🙂

  14. Eric Alagan says:

    “Yeah, I know I’m a female soldier – but that doesn’t stop me oogling at girls with tight skirts.”

  15. Shreyank says:

    still laughing !

  16. Nice little one. Hope the queen gets to see this and takes some action.

  17. Funny and unexpected! Good job.

  18. Dee says:

    Oh I loved this! A great take on the prompt.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s