“Just Another Day”

copyright Renee Heath

(copyright Renee Heath)

At exactly 9:00, I entered the Bidwell Exchange as Nadia clicked her iPod and took to her toes.
While bank employees gathered to watch the beautiful ballerina perform in front of the main door, I moved to the cashier’s window and presented my note. The teller opened his drawer and handed me a plain black bag. I thanked him and left the building.
Nadia completed her pirouette, retrieved her iPod and joined me in the waiting car. We turned the corner and the teller jumped in as the alarm went off. 
For us, it was just another day, another dollar.

(Written for Friday Fictioneers, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, August 9, 2013.)

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40 Responses to “Just Another Day”

  1. What civilized and cultured bank robbers! They’ll certainly be on the evening news. The pace of your story went perfectly with what you wrote.

    janet

  2. misskzebra says:

    I feel like they deserve every penny…

  3. Dear VB,

    Mesmerized I was. Here’s my money, too.

    Aloha,

    doug

  4. summerstommy2 says:

    Nice inside outside job VB. well done.

    • vbholmes says:

      Many thanks–hard to take a bank without a little inside help. Our teller’s on to his next position and our ballerina is polishing her act as the trio looks forward to another day….

  5. Gabriella says:

    Excellent! Hypnotising people to rob the bank!

  6. vbholmes says:

    What higher compliment for a dancer than to say her performance was hypnotic–she sends her thanks.

  7. Hi V.B.,
    Very clever story, a complete caper tale in 100 words. Well done. Ron

  8. vbholmes says:

    Many thanks, Ron. If Nadia quits the team, I’ll give Maria a call–you never know where a little professional experience will lead.

  9. Joe Owens says:

    THe attractive girls in the skimpy outfits always command attention, even if they are ballerinas.

  10. The teller jumping in the car adds an ironic twist. Ho hum! Just another day. 🙂

  11. pattisj says:

    Fast action, and an even quicker getaway! Fun read.

  12. Dear VB,

    That trio certainly had their toe shoes in line and so did you. A robbery en pointe. Clever heist and a clever story.

    shalom

    Rochelle

  13. vbholmes says:

    Many thanks, Rochelle–their routine is well choreographed.

  14. Jan Brown says:

    A clever diversion, and a very clever story! Well done.

  15. That’s a unique look at things. I guess the best distractions are the beautiful ones.

  16. Great take on the prompt. Still would like to see Nadia, nevertheless!

  17. vb holmes says:

    Just flash your wad, and with a grand jeté, Nadia will miraculously appear at your side. Of course, you’d best watch your wad, or it will disappear into her pocket, and with another grand jeté, she’ll exit stage right. This gang is not above taking advantage of an opportune petty heist.

  18. How very gentlemanly and ladylike! 🙂

  19. What a great diversion… well done Nadia

  20. rgayer55 says:

    This story brought to mind the Home Depot scam where the college girls ask a middle age man for a ride. Once inside the car, they remove all their clothes and demand his wallet. The punch line is; this happened to me three times last week and twice this Wednesday 🙂

  21. Oh yes. A bit of distraction robbery. Very nice. Hope they got away.

  22. Everything has been said but I agree, nice tale in 100 words. Great twist having the teller jump in.

  23. bennitheblog says:

    Oo, I like that there is a sign for BOOST mobile, too. Great ending.

  24. Dee says:

    Nicely constructed story and well written. A thoroughly entertaining robbery.
    Dee

  25. annisik51 says:

    All those years training at the barre to end up behind bars … Inventive take on the prompt and well ‘choreographed’. Ann

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