“Shades of ‘Sammy'”

(Over at dVerse, Victoria recommends the use of active verbs.)

I open-close
the door
to the dive
on 29th Street
and head-to-toe
the crowd
on the dance floor.

My eye digitizes
Izzy Cronin,
my go-to guy.
I slip-slide
the twinkletoes
and shoulder-tap
my pigeon.

His memory card
to his brain-trust
and he
it outta here

I slow-boat it
over to the bar
and two-finger
the hootch-handler
for a double
on the rocks.

I’m a patient man.
I’ll pop Izzy later.

(Written for dVerse, Meeting the Bar, “Banish Boredom: Rx: Verbs!” January 16, 2014.)

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13 Responses to “Shades of ‘Sammy'”

  1. Ya may not nail ’em er ya drink too many rusty nails.

  2. Mary says:

    No boring verbs in THIS poem. Love your verb combos & your light-hearted touch. Favorite is ‘slow-boat.’

  3. brian miller says:

    ha. nice…love your hyphen words…this has a bit of a noir feel to it as well…i could see it in black n white….

  4. janet says:

    Nice to see you, Sammy.


  5. Great voice to this…sounds ganster-like and I love the hyphenation.

  6. Great verb choices. Sammy is one shady guy and Izzy ain’t got a chance.

  7. kkkkaty1 says:

    This swings with great verbs….loved it!

  8. gila_mon says:

    “I slip-slide through the twinkletoes” such attitude, great character sketch here, the names evocative as well

  9. alan1704 says:

    Well crafted and full of words that work and nicely fit together.

  10. billgncs says:

    Sammy!!! good to see ya.

  11. Great to see you Sammy,,, it’s been a while, and it must be a premiere on dVerse… and no dictionary needed here…

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