(Over at dVerse, Victoria recommends the use of active verbs.)
I open-close
the door
to the dive
on 29th Street
and head-to-toe
the crowd
that’s
swinging-and-swaying
on the dance floor.
My eye digitizes
Izzy Cronin,
my go-to guy.
I slip-slide
through
the twinkletoes
and shoulder-tap
my pigeon.
His memory card
telegraphs
red-flashers
to his brain-trust
and he
two-steps
it outta here
I slow-boat it
over to the bar
and two-finger
the hootch-handler
for a double
on the rocks.
I’m a patient man.
I’ll pop Izzy later.
(Written for dVerse, Meeting the Bar, “Banish Boredom: Rx: Verbs!” January 16, 2014.)
Ya may not nail ’em er ya drink too many rusty nails.
No boring verbs in THIS poem. Love your verb combos & your light-hearted touch. Favorite is ‘slow-boat.’
ha. nice…love your hyphen words…this has a bit of a noir feel to it as well…i could see it in black n white….
Nice to see you, Sammy.
janet
Great voice to this…sounds ganster-like and I love the hyphenation.
Great verb choices. Sammy is one shady guy and Izzy ain’t got a chance.
This swings with great verbs….loved it!
“I slip-slide through the twinkletoes” such attitude, great character sketch here, the names evocative as well
Well crafted and full of words that work and nicely fit together.
Sammy!!! good to see ya.
Great to see you Sammy,,, it’s been a while, and it must be a premiere on dVerse… and no dictionary needed here…
Iz is cooked ~
‘Fraid so….