“Waiting for Orion”

Titan tall.
Six feet at ten
six three at twenty.

heliotrope blue.
spaghetti straight.
blond begonias.

of the Isles.

a coarse muslin
in a world
of silk.

for her

Written for dVerse Poets. Meeting the Bar: It’s a small, small world (40 words or less). August 5, 2014.

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18 Responses to “Waiting for Orion”

  1. I just googled Orion – so she’s waiting for a Greek Hunter aye? Sounds sexy… heheh… I would think a hunter could handle a 6’3″ Goddess… nice write

  2. Mary says:

    I am really not familiar with the mythology in this, but I enjoyed the descriptions and the flow of the words.

  3. Bodhirose says:

    Wow…she’s really tall. Even those in coarse muslin can have dreams of silk…

  4. brian miller says:

    wow. quite the description of her in this…i like the bookends of the Titan and Orion…
    def some sensual undertones to your description of her as well….

  5. Grace says:

    What a tall and beautiful goddess ~ I am admiring the line breaks, so well done ~

  6. Blond begonia spaghetti strands of hair is a good image:)

  7. claudia says:

    very cool description of her… love the hair and how she’s waiting there for orion

  8. What an amazing description – the hair is exquisite…

  9. Polly says:

    Oh! Those begonia strands, wondrous! 🙂

  10. Orion’s not so small, himself. Good match. Although I like the hair imagery, I am fond of the coarse muslin beauty description. Might imply a goddess of simple origins. Don’t know, which makes for interesting poetry when there are more questions than answers. Amazing the word pictures you create in 40 words. Impressive.

    • vbholmes says:

      High praise indeed, Lynne, thanks! I just wrote a description of how I perceive her and decided to delete it so the reader can paint his own portrait.

  11. Sumana Roy says:

    absolutely beautiful…

  12. Glenn Buttkus says:

    A marvelous use of 40 words, I say! Love the whole third stanza; this needing to add brevity to our poetics, in your case, is far from restrictive; just rendered down to valuable essentials.

  13. vesperteen says:

    The references are so strong, and the variety of words is refreshing. A fortified combination. This was a great, great read.

  14. Oloriel says:

    Beautiful poem, I loved the intertwining of the imagery and the symbolism.

  15. Truedessa says:

    Interesting poem..waiting for the warrior in the sky..

  16. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    You make her sound far more interesting than lesser deities!

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