“An Alliterative Absurdity”

The radiant rays
of a reticent sun
resolutely remain reclused
behind a resplendent
rose-colored cloud.
They refuse to reappear
as requested
by the resounding roar
of ritualistic revivalists
who seek to recruit
the reluctant rural residents
with their reinvigorated regimen
of religious sun-revering rites.

Sammy the Gat says
No sun =
No converts=
No fun, Nia.
(And that, like this poem, is an in-joke.)

(Written for dVerse, Meeting the Bar: Diaphanous Diction. April 16, 2015.)

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29 Responses to “An Alliterative Absurdity”

  1. Anna says:

    I see you went all out on the alliteration. Since it’s an in-joke I feel at a loss to comment. I’m impressed with how much alliteration you used and still kept meaning.

  2. Grace says:

    I love the play of R words, great job on the alliteration~ Somehow the absurdity made sense smiles ~

  3. kanzensakura says:

    Such fun…all the “r”s….richly rollicking – Yes, I do like this!

  4. I’m not usually a fan of over-the-top alliteration, but you pulled it off remarkably. Peace, Linda

  5. Glenn Buttkus says:

    “over the top alliteration” indeed, somehow wringing a thread of meaning through it like a radiant red ribbon. You had me at “Sammy the Gat”, making me curious about the rest of the story.

    • vbholmes says:

      Sammy the Gat is a character I occasionally write. He speaks in slang and improbable synonyms which is why he came to mind when I was fooling around with alliteration.

  6. I’ll stick with the sun and be A son as well..:)

  7. thotpurge says:

    That was fun to read!!!

  8. I wanna be in on this joke please… smiles

  9. Ah.. whenever Sammy appears I feel outside a little.. it’s been a while. Love the ring of r:s.. would be great to be read by a Scotsman 🙂

  10. lynn__ says:

    I like alliteration too…this one you carried to the point of ridiculous 🙂

  11. this was fun to read – loved the roiling riotous r’s throughout

  12. Kathy Reed says:

    A refreshing response to the prompt..I’m learning more about alliteration!

  13. Sabio Lantz says:

    Great fun.
    It is interesting how many participants are choosing alliteration as their favorite sound instead of rhyme. I prefer it often myself.

  14. Sabio Lantz says:

    Loved the pokes at they hyper religious

  15. I am a bit of an alliteration addict…..so I definitely dug this. 😉

  16. I believe you had fun with this one, VB. I believe our Florida sun worshiping beach goers have turned it into a religious rite. No sun=no fun. 🙂

  17. At first glace I read the title incorrectly as Alternative Absurdity. The generally accepted absurdities are so pedestrian and public school.

  18. M says:

    well, as the cowardly lion might say, Roar ~

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