The radiant rays
of a reticent sun
resolutely remain reclused
behind a resplendent
They refuse to reappear
by the resounding roar
of ritualistic revivalists
who seek to recruit
the reluctant rural residents
with their reinvigorated regimen
of religious sun-revering rites.
Sammy the Gat says
No sun =
No fun, Nia.
(And that, like this poem, is an in-joke.)
(Written for dVerse, Meeting the Bar: Diaphanous Diction. April 16, 2015.)
I see you went all out on the alliteration. Since it’s an in-joke I feel at a loss to comment. I’m impressed with how much alliteration you used and still kept meaning.
Thanks for commenting, Anna–like most in-jokes, the stories behind Sammy’s comment and my poem are classic flat tires in the retelling.
I love the play of R words, great job on the alliteration~ Somehow the absurdity made sense smiles ~
I am imagining this read by someone with a speech impediment for R…
How about being read aloud by someone who’s a combination of Bjorn’s Scotsman and your r-challenged speaker–a brogue wihout an r–that should be a hoot.
Now that’s a compliment–thanks, Grace.
Such fun…all the “r”s….richly rollicking – Yes, I do like this!
“Richly rollicking”..I like that. Thanks, Hayes.
I’m not usually a fan of over-the-top alliteration, but you pulled it off remarkably. Peace, Linda
Thanks, Linda. I must admit, I’m a closet lover of alliteration and have to watch myself when writing as it creeps in all the time.
“over the top alliteration” indeed, somehow wringing a thread of meaning through it like a radiant red ribbon. You had me at “Sammy the Gat”, making me curious about the rest of the story.
Sammy the Gat is a character I occasionally write. He speaks in slang and improbable synonyms which is why he came to mind when I was fooling around with alliteration.
I’ll stick with the sun and be A son as well..:)
Ah..a candidate for recruitment.
That was fun to read!!!
Glad you enjoyed it–it’s fun to concoct odd-ball sentences.
I wanna be in on this joke please… smiles
“You had to be there….”
Ah.. whenever Sammy appears I feel outside a little.. it’s been a while. Love the ring of r:s.. would be great to be read by a Scotsman 🙂
Sammy’s been on vacation for a while–will have to bring him home one of these days.
I like alliteration too…this one you carried to the point of ridiculous 🙂
this was fun to read – loved the roiling riotous r’s throughout
A refreshing response to the prompt..I’m learning more about alliteration!
It is interesting how many participants are choosing alliteration as their favorite sound instead of rhyme. I prefer it often myself.
Loved the pokes at they hyper religious
I am a bit of an alliteration addict…..so I definitely dug this. 😉
I believe you had fun with this one, VB. I believe our Florida sun worshiping beach goers have turned it into a religious rite. No sun=no fun. 🙂
At first glace I read the title incorrectly as Alternative Absurdity. The generally accepted absurdities are so pedestrian and public school.
well, as the cowardly lion might say, Roar ~