(A haibun inspired by the quote: “At every moment of our lives, we all have one foot in a fairy tale and the other in the abyss.” Paulo Coelho.)
A sea of sand as far as I can see. An azure sky falls into teal blue water and backdrops a solitary dwelling. The home shelters unending love, eternal beauty and the infinite knowledge of man. A dream realized. Until I step back and the fantasy free-falls into the abyss of reality.
Fine house built on beach
Concrete walls withstand high winds
Water erodes sand.
(Written for dVerse Poets, Halibun Monday #7. February 15, 2015.)
Somehow I feel the haiku really hitting the nail on the head… so much concrete wasted building on sun… we are not the best of builders always.
If one foot’s in a fairy tale both feet are in an abyss.
What’s real and what isn’t? Your haibun is a very effective way of asking that!
Building castles in the sand… Very succinct and self-assured – I wish I could have been as concise as that. Admirable!
I love the title and how true that the water erodes the sand and all that we have built up ~ The beauty in the initially opening lines is a vivid contrast to that abyss of reality ~
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So much said in such a tightly woven piece. The haiku is a powerful proverb.
Sometimes one does wish those dreams were a reality! I like your haiku, which expresses the theme of your prose so very succinctly and well.
Ah,yes. The biblical adage brought to life. Wonderful.
Fairy tales are not substantial are they?
right from your title – so many contrasts
The house on sand is a powerful metaphor.
SMiLes.. iN depth of mY
illness.. dreams so
strange as Ativan
comes and goes..
mansion in the woods
i dream of with swimming
pool and two story guest house..
ponds crystal clear iN forest green..
houses mean noThing..:)
So true–clear-eyed at last, we realize the folly of coveting things.
Yes.. Indeed.. My friend.. Smiles..:)
I enjoyed how the words just “rolled”out as I read this 🙂
Shifting sands can undermine a lot. A good lesson learned from that abyss but don’t always pay attention.