Mirage

(A haibun inspired by the quote: “At every moment of our lives, we all have one foot in a fairy tale and the other in the abyss.” Paulo Coelho.)

 
A sea of sand as far as I can see. An azure sky falls into teal blue water and backdrops a solitary dwelling. The home shelters unending love, eternal beauty and the infinite knowledge of man. A dream realized. Until I step back and the fantasy free-falls into the abyss of reality.

Fine house built on beach
Concrete walls withstand high winds
Water erodes sand.

 

(Written for dVerse Poets, Halibun Monday #7. February 15, 2015.)

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16 Responses to Mirage

  1. Somehow I feel the haiku really hitting the nail on the head… so much concrete wasted building on sun… we are not the best of builders always.

  2. If one foot’s in a fairy tale both feet are in an abyss.

  3. What’s real and what isn’t? Your haibun is a very effective way of asking that!

  4. MarinaSofia says:

    Building castles in the sand… Very succinct and self-assured – I wish I could have been as concise as that. Admirable!

  5. Grace says:

    I love the title and how true that the water erodes the sand and all that we have built up ~ The beauty in the initially opening lines is a vivid contrast to that abyss of reality ~

    Thanks for joining us at Haibun Monday and wishing you a happy week ~

  6. So much said in such a tightly woven piece. The haiku is a powerful proverb.

  7. Mary says:

    Sometimes one does wish those dreams were a reality! I like your haiku, which expresses the theme of your prose so very succinctly and well.

  8. whimsygizmo says:

    Ah,yes. The biblical adage brought to life. Wonderful.

  9. Fairy tales are not substantial are they?

  10. trishwrites1 says:

    right from your title – so many contrasts

  11. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    The house on sand is a powerful metaphor.

  12. SMiLes.. iN depth of mY
    illness.. dreams so
    strange as Ativan
    comes and goes..
    mansion in the woods
    i dream of with swimming
    pool and two story guest house..
    ponds crystal clear iN forest green..

    Now recovered
    FoRest ManSioNs
    houses mean noThing..:)

  13. ZQ says:

    I enjoyed how the words just “rolled”out as I read this 🙂

  14. Bodhirose says:

    Shifting sands can undermine a lot. A good lesson learned from that abyss but don’t always pay attention.

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