“Roxie Got the Pic”



When you play piano in a joint like Roxie’s, you see it all. The dames with the short skirts, long legs and assigned seats at the bar. The card sharks with their extra aces. The craps saps with their loaded dice. The pool hustlers with their phony bucks. The cops. The robbers. All of ’em, alchies.

But the dude in the argyle socks takes the cake.

Tonight, the crowd is mellow. I’m doodlin’ “Chopsticks” for fun and need a second pair of hands. This British bloke saunters over to the ole 88 and jumps right in.

Roxie got the pic.
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(Photo by John Nixon. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, Friday Fictioneers. June 12, 2013.)

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32 Responses to “Roxie Got the Pic”

  1. Sandra says:

    🙂 🙂 Convincing voice too, but you always do that well. Nice one vb.

  2. Great story. I like the descriptions of all the different patrons.

  3. That was quite a jump

  4. Joe Owens says:

    You set such a realistic atmosphere for the bar with stark character definitions.

  5. vbholmes says:

    Best keep a close eye on your money at Roxie’s–there are a lot of others who are doing it as well.

  6. That was brilliant. I love the twist and the smoky voice of the storyteller.

  7. wmqcolby says:

    HAHAHAHAHAHA! He certainly jumped in, all right, all right! Super-duper, Randy!

  8. Hannah says:

    Very atmospheric story!

  9. I am laughing out loud. Great description of each person’s role and the argyle socks does take the cake. 🙂

  10. Penny L Howe says:

    This is excellent. Great play with words! 🙂

  11. Sammy or just a relative?

    janet

  12. Dear VB,

    You made me laugh out loud. Your characters and the voice were vivid and fun.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  13. Linda Vernon says:

    Haha and jumps right in! That’s the kind of joint I’d like to hang out in. I love the Guys and Dolls vibe this had! ;D

  14. Shainbird says:

    You painted the atmosphere perfectly!

  15. Tone perfect voice.
    And I am delighted to share photocredits with Roxie.
    🙂

    • vbholmes says:

      This was a fun prompt–I wrote “Johnnie got the pic” in the first draft, but it just didn’t have the right ring, so Roxie won. However, she’s a big-hearted proprietress and she’s telling all her customers that the credit really belongs to you.

  16. denmother says:

    Haha, Leave it to a Brit…

  17. misskzebra says:

    It wouldn’t take me more than a few drinks before I’d jump into a piano either, but I am a bit of a lightweight.

  18. neenslewy says:

    Wonderful description of this setting, I was there at the bar watching the action unfold!

  19. Love it.. the voice of the narrator is truly convincing

  20. angelgal3176 says:

    Love that, cool as can be 🙂

  21. unspywriter says:

    Chuckling and chortling away here. Good job. Love the litany of the patrons.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/simon-sez/

  22. annisik51 says:

    I can hear Bogey reciting this at the beginning of a film/movie. Is it set in Casablanca I wonder.As a ‘Brit’ the behaviour of said Brit in your story doesn’t take me by surprise, except he’d apologise as he/she plunged into the piano, especially if he/she’d been thrown into the piano. Good writing. Ann

  23. Very Mickey Spillane-ish. Nicely done.

  24. petrujviljoen says:

    Described a downtown scene to the ‘T’. Been there, eh?

  25. elappleby says:

    Your writing is so musical. I really enjoyed this.

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