The rain comes down
And brings new life to my garden.
The rain comes down
And sweetens the air of my town.
Its drops inspire many men
And spawn magic worlds for children.
The rain comes down.
(Written for dVersePoets, “Form for All—The Rondelet”. June 13, 2013.)
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cool…the happy side of rain…the good it does…and hey i dont mind jumping in the puddles myself…nicely done to form…
The rain is magical and brings new life to the garden ~ Lovely work on the refrain and rhyming pattern too ~
Rain – or rather, water – life as we know it.
… and the grass gets taller and taller.
Nicely done.
Well in Miami the rain brings moskeeters the size of Buicks
This has a rhythmic and peaceful feel. The message works well with this form, as the repetition intensifies the rhythm of the rain.
Great rhythm and lovely use of the form.
The repetition works really well here; it is somehow redolent of falling rain. Rain is fine – as long as it stops sometime. Thanks for joining in at dVerse, today.
I really like this as it brings up the summer rain… and just as Tony says the pitter-patter of rain is really great with repetitions. 🙂
Nicely done. I like the inclusion of the children.
love me a warm summer rain…it has power to make us smile…and write…smiles
reading your rondelet, I realize what a beautiful circle this form creates. i love rain and this is a lovely poem.
Splish, splash, lots of fun.
…playful imagery of something so true… you had fun with the form… i can see & feel… loved it… smiles…
Hi Kelvin,
Thanks for commenting–I am unable to access your new blog.